Monday, December 21, 2009

Official Kissing Day

Okay, so everyone should be all over this. I read about it last week on Katie Ganshert's blog. I guess you're supposed to post a kissing scene from something you wrote. If you're not a writer (gasp!), post your favorite kissing scene.

See why I like this? I mean, kissing. Ahem.

So here's a scene from a novel I wrote this year. It's called Dying to Live. And see this girl, she can feel death. Usually hers. But this time, she thinks it's her "boyfriend's" (they're really just Servant partners masquerading as a couple) turn to kick it. So she's been bawling. And now she's in the bathroom with her bf's "sister."




A knock at the door has us both jumping. She throws me a glance before opening it.
Blake stands in the hall, a dark storm cloud I want to wrap my arms around. “Hey, Cheryl. When did you get here?” He looks at Nora—right in her eyes.
“Just a few minutes ago. Nora was helping me with my makeup. How do I look?”
Blake hesitates, still watching Nora. She’s stuffing jars of makeup in a black case and won’t meet his eye.
“You look beautiful,” he finally says. He reaches toward me and I gladly slip my fingers between his. He plants a kiss on my temple. “Are you ready?” He studies me closer. “Have you been crying?”
The answer to both questions is yes, but I don’t want to say it.
“Nora, I need to talk to Cheryl for a minute. Tell Mom we’ll be right there, will you?”
“Don’t take too long. She’s freaking that we haven’t left yet.”
“You’re the one camped out in the bathroom doing your makeup.”
Nora flounces down the hall without a reply. Blake pulls me  into his bedroom. I’ve been in here a lot, so it’s nothing romantic or anything. His bed is made. His clothes are hung neatly in the closet. The desk practically has chalk outlines for where things belong. Mr. Organized.
“So tell me why you’ve been crying.” He hasn’t let go of my hand yet.
“Just something with my host family,” I say, trying to shrug it off.
He waits for more. He’s not going to get it.
“I can read the report when I file it,” he threatens.
“Okay.” If he knows about the looming appointment with my dad, he doesn’t spill. If he knows how much I want to kiss him, he doesn’t let it show on his face. “Let’s just go, okay? I don’t want your mom mad at me.”
“Can you still feel it?” he asks, his mouth barely moving.
In a bold gesture, I run my finger up his forearm, imagining I can feel the thin scars from his past life. I clasp my hands behind his neck at the same time he puts his hands on my waist. This is how we danced at Homecoming last week. This is how I always want him to hold me.
“Yeah, I can still feel it. It’s stronger here. It’s so loud. I’m…”
“What?”
“Scared.”
He pauses, and we’re breathing the same air again. In and out, in and out.
“I’ll protect you,” he says.
I want to tell him that it’s not me, it’s him, but I don’t have the chance.
Because he’s closing the distance between us and then we’re kissing kissing kissing.


I hope you participate! If you do, leave me a link so I can go read your mistletoe-inspired post on Kissing Day!

43 comments:

christine said...

Kissing day....Kissing day...No one told me it was kissing day...Hmmmm

BTW - nice post!

Christina Lee said...

YEP--I did it too! Love your scene AND the premise of the story--very cretive you are!!

L. T. Host said...

Nicely done :) Love it!

It's Mad Libs Results day today, so I'm not sure if I'll participate or not. But we'll see :)

Frankie Diane Mallis said...

wwoooooo fun!! I like the tension.

storyqueen said...

This makes me so curious about the rest of the story!!

Shelley

Nisa said...

Oh that sounds so great! I am dying to know more about your story! I love the way you write. :)

I'm all over kissing day. How fun is this? Mine is up: http://wordplayswordplay.blogspot.com/

Tere Kirkland said...

Fun! I linked your post over at my blog. I think I got all the other posts, but I'm not sure.

Ah, kissing scenes. So much fun to write! ;)

T. Anne said...

Oh wow that was fun! I think you novel really sounds like it rocks. Very cool premiss.

Marybeth Poppins said...

I am just Loving Kissing blogfest! Great scene :)

Roni @ FictionGroupie said...

Love your excerpt! Kissing scenes are so much fun to write. Here's my link link for kissing day. :)

Angie said...

That's a great scene, Elana.

Stephanie Thornton said...

I love that last line! Love it!

Here's my link!

Bethany Wiggins said...

Ah, the beauty of romance. Love it.

And BTW, my word verification? SICKO.

Tara McClendon said...

Yeah. Mistletoe day makes me happy. I'm glad you decided to participate in it. :]

Pamela said...

That scene sounds great.

It didn't take me but a moment to locate a kissing scene to post at my blog. :-)

Happy Official Kissing Day!

Pam

L.T. Elliot said...

There's so many things in here to torture me! I want to know more! Past lives, scars, still feeling strange feelings. Ooh. You torment well, Elana.

Secretia said...

Everyone saw me kissing him deeply at that party, but I kept kissing and being kissed.

Jessica said...

Wow, I love the twist that it's his death, not hers. Great lead-up to the kiss!

Solvang Sherrie said...

Great scene! I'm loving all this kissy face on the blogs today :)

I write MG, usually with boy main characters who are about 9 or 10. These readers strongly disapprove of kissing. Maybe I should do a YA so I can write some kissy scenes!

Kristen Torres-Toro said...

Hey, Elana! This was great! Thanks for sharing it!

I don't write a lot of romance, so I couldn't really participate. But I loved reading everyone's posts. They were great!

Have a Merry Christmas!

Tamika: said...

Very intriguing story twist! This is one juicy kissing scene.

V. S said...

Awesome scene!Such an interesting twist! Bravo!

Katie Ganshert said...

Smoochy, smoochy! Great scene, Elena!

Jemi Fraser said...

That's an awesome scene - if I can scrounge out some time, I'll post one later on today :) (Big if...)

Renee Collins said...

Great job building up the tension. It makes the last line very satisfying. kissing, kissing, kissing. Yes! :)

Lizzy Mason said...

Love it, Elana! Yum! :)

I'm so glad you alerted us that it was Kissing Day! My favorite scenes to write! Here's mine:
http://lizzymason.blogspot.com/2009/12/kissing-day.html

Mary said...

Very nice scene - I want to know more about your story. Sounds intriguing. You're welcome to check out mine. I wrote it this morning. First time I wrote a kissing scene.

Iapetus999 said...

Kind of confusing but I like the ending. Would love to read more!
My scene is on my blog.

Cheree said...

There are so many days that I'm not aware exists... thanks for the information, your scene looks great.

Here's mine: http://justifiedlunacy.blogspot.com/2009/12/official-kissing-day.html

Lisa and Laura said...

I can't believe we missed kissing day. Love your excerpt. The finger up the forearm gives me chills.

Sandra said...

I thought every day was Kissing Day! ;)

My scene is here: http://ulbrichalmazan.blogspot.com/2009/12/kiss-and-tell.html

Danyelle said...

Beautiful! Just like you. :)

Melissa said...

I love this scene! I really want to read more:)

Mine's up at mehlane.blogspot.com

ElanaJ said...

Everyday should be kissing day, right? Right. Going to read the linkage.

elizabeth mueller said...

Oooh, Elana!
I loved it! I loved it! I just love writing kissing scenes. *sigh...
Your turn! Come over to my blog and read mine and let me know what you think!

PS--Merry Christmas! ;)

Tina Lynn said...

Oh, freaking heck, that was pure awesomeness! "...a dark storm cloud I want to wrap my arms around..." Wow. Just wow.

sherrinda said...

I loved it! Great writing! Especially liked "breathing the same air" and the "dark storm cloud I want to wrap my arms around". Definitely sigh-worthy!

Stina Lindenblatt said...

Great kiss!

Here's the link to mine. Plus I've included a link to a recent discussion on Absolute Write about the YA kiss.

Jeannie Campbell, LMFT said...

way cool premise. way fun kiss! thanks for sharing! you can read mine here.

jeannie
The Character Therapist

Amalia T. said...

I love the repetition at the end of this scene! Thanks for sharing!

Karen Denise said...

Kissing, Kissing, Kissing...love it, love it, love it!

giddymomof6 said...

Ooh! i love this scene. Very good and tension-filled. I was totally there with them...

Jenni James

Tricia J. O'Brien said...

I love the intensity after he asks if she can still feel it. Great read and intriguing scene! (it's taken me a long time to get through all the posts, but they are so much fun).

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